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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. What are the causes of this problem? What measures can be taken to solve this?

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Always, it is produced
food
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 waste of more than million
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tons throughout the world.
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 issue has caused huge problems that
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 back to several causes.
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 essay will delve into
causes
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the causes
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 and give solutions for dealing with
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 obstacle. First of all, the significant reason that makes interaction
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 more waste production from
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 is a terrible lifestyle.
People
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 do not regard the quantity of
food
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 that they cook, especially
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 do not have economic issues.
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, they do not consider their needs and cook or buy cuisine more than their requirement.
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, most of the Persian families cook extra meals and in the end, they must throw them out as
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trash that leads to being wasted.
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, consumerism is the second cause of wasting
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.
people
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 tend to show themselves as rich
people
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 and when they have a party they order more than 4 types of
food
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 and approximately the quantity is double
guests
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 need. Not only it is not a good way to show their wealth, but
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 it illustrates their brain poverty. To prevent millions of
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 waste every day
people
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 can implement some activities. One of the important things that gets little attention is donating
food
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 to poor
people
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. every family should have a practical attitude for packaging extra cuisine and giving it to families in need.
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,
people
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 must pay attention to the quality of
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 that they want to donate. If they do
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 activity, they will help to reduce
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 trash.
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, individuals have to provide enough
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 for themselves.
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, they can have planning for buying or cooking regarded to family members.
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, nowadays,
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food
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 losses have reached more than millions of tons,
people
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 with
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a useful plans
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a useful plan
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 can help to control them. they can improve their sense of empathy with poor
people
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.
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Focus on clarity by using simpler sentence structures to ensure that ideas are comprehensible at first reading.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a solid framework for discussion.
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The response addresses both parts of the task, discussing causes and measures effectively.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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