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Band 4

You are due to move into a rented apartment next month but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter: – explain your situation – describe your problems – tell him/her when you think you can move in

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter because I have not been moved for them.I have some
health
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 issues that's why I do not reach
.
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out.
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 Recently my
father
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's
health
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is
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has
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 not well.I have moved with my family but my
father
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 has some sugar
problem
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problems
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.That's why I went
for
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to
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hospital
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the hospital
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 to
checkup
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check
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health
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my health
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 and medical reports.
Health
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 causes problems I invest money in my
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father
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father's
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health
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.
It's
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That's
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reason
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the reason
a reason
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 I
do
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have
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 not
send
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sent
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rent
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the rent
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 for
this
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 month. So,sorry for
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this kinds
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this kind
these kinds
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 of
problems
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problem
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 and do not give rent. If I can save money I definitely
sand
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send
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to
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it to
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 you for rent. I try
to
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apply
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my best to reach next month . Because I think my
father
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's
health
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 is well-being in
this
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 month.
Hence
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, If I go I send
to
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apply
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you
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a
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message or call
to
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apply
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for information. Yours Sincerely, Shital
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coherence cohesion
Structure your letter to address each prompt separately. Begin each paragraph with a distinct idea to enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to make it easier for the reader to follow your thoughts.
task achievement
Enhance your language use by avoiding sentence fragments and ensuring subject-verb agreement.
task achievement
You have included clear sections with explanations, problems, and a timeline for resolution, which addresses the task prompt effectively.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate for a formal letter, which contributes positively to the overall tone.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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