The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the average weekly spending by families in two different years (1968 and 2018).
Overall
, in 1968 families spent the highest amount of their weekly incomes on food. Linking Words
While
, in 2018 the highest proportion was on leisure. Meanwhile, people did not spend much money on personal goods in the past. Linking Words
In addition
, fuel and power had the Linking Words
least
percentage of spending in both years.
Correct word choice
lowest
firstly
, 35% of the weekly income of families where spent on food in 1968 (the largest proportion). Linking Words
While
Linking Words
,
it reduced in 2018 to approximately Remove the comma
apply
the
half (17%). Correct article usage
apply
In addition
, the Linking Words
spendings
on fuel and power, clothing and footwear, and personal goods all increased in 2018 compared to 1968 with nearly 7%, 10%, and 8%, respectively.
Fix the agreement mistake
spending
On the other hand
, the spending on housing, transport, and leisure elevated greatly from 1968 to 2018 with 19%, 14%, and 23%, respectively. Linking Words
However
, the amount of money spent on household goods remained the same Linking Words
with
around 7% in both years.Change preposition
at
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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