The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the average weekly spending by families in two different years (1968 and 2018).
Overall
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, in 1968 families spent the highest amount of their weekly incomes on food.
While
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, in 2018 the highest proportion was on leisure. Meanwhile, people did not spend much money on personal goods in the past.
In addition
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, fuel and power had the
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percentage of spending in both years.
firstly
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, 35% of the weekly income of families where spent on food in 1968 (the largest proportion).
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,
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it reduced in 2018 to approximately
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half (17%).
In addition
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, the
spendings
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on fuel and power, clothing and footwear, and personal goods all increased in 2018 compared to 1968 with nearly 7%, 10%, and 8%, respectively.
On the other hand
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, the spending on housing, transport, and leisure elevated greatly from 1968 to 2018 with 19%, 14%, and 23%, respectively.
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, the amount of money spent on household goods remained the same
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around 7% in both years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, while".
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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