The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts provide information about the percentage of
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the populations
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populations
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population's
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total Spending in a
specifics
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specific
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European country
was
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spent on Sort of commodities and services in the years 1958 and 2008.
overall
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,
In
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At
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the beginning of the period, clothing was the biggest segment,
while
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luxury goods made up the lowest part of the chart. In comparison,
at the end
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of the period, housing was the
hightest
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highest
part and the smallest sector was made by travel and transport. In 1958 ,
housing
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the housing
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sector accounted for 22% and
increasing
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increased
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by 32% in 2008. At the beginning of the period, food and luxury goods
compromised
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comprised
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8% and 79% respectively and these figures rose moderately to 17%
and
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apply
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in 2008. In 2008,
clothing
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the clothing
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sector
contribution
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contributed
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32% and , showed decreased gradually by 12% in 2008 .
Moreover
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, Entertainment and travel/transport made up 18% and 13% Sequentially and these
figure
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figures
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downward slightly to almost 16% and 6% in 2008.
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