Some people say that history is one of the most important subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Science to improve ourselves. Some people believe the history curriculum is more important than
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other beliefs since and computer subjects are very interesting.In
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I will explain my personal beliefs. On the one hand,males and females
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more beneficial for several reasons.
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, It helps to know about previous cultures.
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the journalist and tell the
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about our country in the past.
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but not least, It helps us to improve our
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That way is attractive the tourists to know and deeper into our
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, ladies and gentlemen are keen on learning science and
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. As you know now
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that subjects are
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modern and beneficial to the
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future.
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, we need to involve computers in all subjects .
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ways to students like
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videos, games and experiments. In
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analysis of both points of view. I think
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very important to us more than any curricula in the world because
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Try to expand your points with more concrete examples or evidence. For instance, when discussing the importance of history or technology, you could provide specific instances where they have significantly contributed to society.
coherence cohesion
Avoid overusing certain phrases like "On the one hand" and "On the other hand." Instead, try to use varied linking words to improve flow and clarity.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear central idea and that all sentences within a paragraph closely relate to that main idea.
language and grammar
Work on improving grammatical accuracy and sentence variety. This will make your writing more engaging and easier to follow.
language and grammar
Consider breaking lengthy sentences into shorter ones for clarity and readability.
task achievement
Maintain a consistent tone throughout the essay, and ensure the conclusion provides a concise summary of your discussed points before stating your opinion clearly.
task achievement
The essay attempts to cover both perspectives on the importance of history and science, indicating a thoroughness in addressing the task.
coherence cohesion
The introduction sets up the discussion well, and the conclusion ties back to your main argument, providing a clear position statement.
coherence cohesion
The essay reflects a good intention to structure ideas by presenting one point of view per paragraph.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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