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Task1 The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, *20., and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task1 The chart below gives information about Southland's main exports in 2000, *20., and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following bar chart shows the major exports in
Southland’s
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 during 2000, 20… and 2025. It
divided
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 into three categories ( international
tourism
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,
dairy
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products
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, and
meat
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products
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). Units are measured in
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billion
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billions
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 of bounds in the bar chart.
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clear
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 the majority of percentage of the international
tourism
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 and
dairy
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products
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were
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decline
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,
while
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meat
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products
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was
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rose in
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the Southland’s
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Southland’s
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.
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hand
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 it is expected that in the future
the
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meat
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products
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 will be lowest compared to
dairy
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products
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 and international
tourism
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 will rise. In 2000, 10
billion
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pounds
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exports
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of
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for
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the
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international
tourism
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,
while
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dairy
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products
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was
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 about 7
billion
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pounds
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, and
the
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meat
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products
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was
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 almost 6
billion
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pounds
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. In the future of 2025
the
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international
tourism
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 and daily
products
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 will rise
almost
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to almost
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 between 10-9.5
billion
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pounds
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,
whereas
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the
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meat
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products
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 will decrease lowest point to 5
billion
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pounds
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourism, dairy, products, meat, billion, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • trends
  • projections
  • categories
  • international tourism
  • dairy products
  • meat products
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • analyze
  • highlight
  • summarize
  • main features
  • comparisons
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