A friend had a new born baby, you have picked up a present for the baby and want to visit to give it to him / her. Write a letter to – - Congratulate your friend. - Tell him why you picked up the mentioned present. - Suggest arrangements for the visit.

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Dear Friend

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want to congratulate

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new born

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baby

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new born

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is always a

blessings

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of the god and you got these

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. I am very happy for you

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want to meet you and

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about the present for

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child and

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visited to toy shop and

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bought some toys for

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purchased some clothes because

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time you are

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busy and cannot do everything so

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purchased some clothes as well.

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want to meet you and

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. so please allow me to visit your home so

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can give my presents to

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want to spend some time with him or her. If you are

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visit

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convience

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. Your friend Gurbakhshish Singh 2 Jan 2025

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coherence cohesion

Try to enhance paragraph coherence by developing ideas more fully in each paragraph.

task achievement

Pay attention to the use of articles and verb tenses for grammatical accuracy.

suitable writing tone

The letter maintains a warm and friendly tone throughout, which is appropriate for the task.

greeting and closing

The greeting and closing are appropriately used and contribute to the structure of the letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

167 words

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A friend had a new born baby, you have picked up a present for the baby and want to visit to give it to him / her. Write a letter to – - Congratulate your friend. - Tell him why you picked up the mentioned present. - Suggest arrangements for the visit.

The Closing

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In many countries the widespread use of internet has given people more freedom to work or study at home instead of traveling to work or college. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

Some parents believe that extra private lesson outside school hours, where students work alone with a teach, can help them do better at school. Others disagree. What are the advantages and disadvantages of private tuition? And give your opinion.

It is generally believed that some people are born with certains talents, for instance for sport or music, and other are not. However, it is sometimes claimed tha any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both the views and gie your own opinion.