Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others beilieve that the purpose of the museums is to eduacte. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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which was always debatable and has become more controversial with many
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claiming that gallery and exhibition buildings often serve
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about civilization.
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the most preponderant one stems from
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and development including
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is that antique galleries emphasize education about
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of old technology by reserving their actual products and gadgets. Categorically
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it can not be ignored that the main reason behind
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of specific art, culture and tradition. On
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, a couple of reasons drive me to consider the opposite notion as well many
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argue that
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role of museums is to entertain,
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is the place where many
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artefacts
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people
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can feel bored when just reading and listening to historical content.
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it is important for museums to perform
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interesting
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, they can do a quiz about historical events and include rewards for the right answers. That way
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will definitely be more interested in the exhibition and they can both have fun and learn new things
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doing these activities. to
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conclusion that
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museums
and art galleries provide education about culture and
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civilisation
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,
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side of
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perspective
of making it more entertaining and
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interesting
for the visitors should not be overlooked either.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider clearly outlining your thesis statement in the introduction to guide readers on what your main argument is about.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that relates closely to the rest of the paragraph to maintain a more logical structure.
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Clarify your stance in a more concise manner and ensure that it is consistently argued throughout the essay.
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Ensure sentences are complete and clear to improve comprehension and make your ideas easier to understand.
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The essay presents both viewpoints, offering a balanced discussion before stating an opinion.
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There is an attempt to include examples, such as the suggestion of using quizzes and rewards in museums, which adds practical relevance to the argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes the discussion effectively, highlighting both educational and entertainment perspectives.
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