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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider clearly outlining your thesis statement in the introduction to guide readers on what your main argument is about.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that relates closely to the rest of the paragraph to maintain a more logical structure.
Task Response
Clarify your stance in a more concise manner and ensure that it is consistently argued throughout the essay.
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Ensure sentences are complete and clear to improve comprehension and make your ideas easier to understand.
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The essay presents both viewpoints, offering a balanced discussion before stating an opinion.
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There is an attempt to include examples, such as the suggestion of using quizzes and rewards in museums, which adds practical relevance to the argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes the discussion effectively, highlighting both educational and entertainment perspectives.