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You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter -explain your situation -describe your problems -tell him/her when you think you can start

#job #week #employer #-explain #situation #-describe #-tell
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Dear
sir
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Sir
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 / mam I am Gurbakhshish Singh. Recently
i
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I
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 joined
the
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your company and my joining date is on next
week
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.
unfortuantaly
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Unfortunately
, I am not able to join
next
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you next
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week
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 owing to
the
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some problems.
Initially
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, I am not able to join because there is some medical emergency in my family and
due to
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this
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 I am not able to join next
week
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. Because
,
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 there is no one in my family who can handle all
sitatuations
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situations
. my father is now old to handle all
sitautions
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situations
.
Secondly
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, about the medical condition my wife is
pregnent
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pregnant
 and she is going to give birth to my child next
week
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. Moving
further
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,
in
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at
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this
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 time my wife needs me a lot for mental support as well
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as physically
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physically
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physical
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.I am the only person in the family who can take her to the hospital and for other
kin d
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kinds
 of medical tests. In
last
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, I am able to join from next
week
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 from
monday
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Monday
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. Please allow me to join from next
week
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 because I want to help my wife in
this
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sitautions
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situation
situations
 and as well
i
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I
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 do not want to
loose
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lose
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this
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 job. Thank you
Your
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Yours
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 Faithfully Gurbakhshish Singh 2 Jan 2025
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Grammar
Try to avoid grammatical errors such as subject-verb agreement and verb tense (e.g., 'i joined the your company' should be 'I recently joined your company').
Structure
Consider breaking down sentences that are too long to improve readability (e.g., 'Moving further...' sentence).
Grammar
Ensure to use consistent capitalization for pronouns like 'I.'
Task Achievement
The letter adequately addresses the prompt by explaining the situation, describing the problems, and proposing a start date.
Tone
Polite tone helps achieve the right writing tone.
Tone
The letter maintains a respectful tone throughout.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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