the plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre nw,and how it will look after redevelopment. summerise the information by selecing and reporting the main features,and make comparision where relevant.

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The upper picture

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illustrates

illustrats

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illustrates

how is a university's

sports

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center

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the

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moment and the other shows how it will be after renovation.

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, what stands out from the maps is that the total

erea

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area

is projected to be extended. And some facilities and leisure tools are added. Looking at the details,the major change is likely to be the

enlargment

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enlargement

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the building

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both

east

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and west sides, which provides the suitable

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area

for more instruments and facilities. Both of the outdoor courts are planned to be removed and a leisure pool and a

sports

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hall will be introduced, respectively, on the left and right side of the

sport

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center

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. Another interesting change will be the erection of two dance studios on the east side in order to cover more people's interests. There will not be a significant change in the

centeral

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central

zone but, looking at the southern part of the future plans, some substantial changes

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projected, first of all, two changing rooms will appear on each

sides

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edge.

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this

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sports

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shop will be added to make buying

sports

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tool

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more convenient. And

finally

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, by

introducement

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of a cafe, which will be on the right side they try to build a

palce

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place

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people can hang out

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Language Accuracy

Work on refining grammar and spelling to improve clarity, such as 'illustrates' instead of 'illustrats', and 'area' instead of 'eree'.

Task Achievement

Provide more details and specific examples to show the changes, such as mentioning the specific types of equipment or spaces that will be added or removed.

Coherence and Cohesion

Improve the logical progression of ideas by grouping similar changes together rather than jumping between different areas of the layout.

Task Achievement

The essay effectively identifies the major planned changes in the sports centre layout.

Coherence and Cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are present, which structure the text well.

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

212 words

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