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the maps below show recent changes in the town of Kimsville.

the maps below show recent changes in the town of Kimsville.
#maps #show #changes #town #kimsville
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The two maps show prominent changes which
has been take
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 place in the town of Kimsville in the year between 2002 and today. As we can see, the town has been much more urbanized with new
accomodation
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accommodations
 and some entertainment facilities. If we look at
west
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the west
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 side of the map, we can see that
new
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a new
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 train station has been built and
in
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on
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 the other side of the map, the factory has been completely removed and it has been converted to the software company.
Also
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, some green areas and a shopping
center
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centre
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 have
been remained
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remained
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 stable
in
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 both maps.
In
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At
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 the bottom of the city centre,
old
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the old
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 cinema has been transformed
to
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into
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the
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a
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 pub, which is more popular
in
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these days. Another notable change is that
,
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green
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the green
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 area in the north-west of the map has been. uprooted and
instead
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 of that, the new apartments have been
introduction
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. The final substantial change is that
,
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 green trees have been knocked down to make way for
football
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a football
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 stadium.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • residential development
  • transformation
  • industrial areas
  • housing estates
  • service-oriented economy
  • modern apartment complexes
  • amenities
  • transportation infrastructure
  • congestion
  • bicycle lanes
  • eco-friendly
  • accessibility
  • public spaces
  • recreational facilities
  • quality of life
  • vibrant community
  • leisure
  • exercise
  • social interaction
  • well-being
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