The diagram below illustrates the recycling process of discarded glass bottles. Provide a summary of the information by mentioning the main features and make appropriate comparisons wherever relevant.
The diagram provides information about how discarded
glass
Use synonyms
bottles
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recycle
.
Wrong verb form
are recycled
Overall
, there are 3 stages of recycling Linking Words
of
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apply
glass
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bottles
, Use synonyms
including
collection, purification and forming.
Change preposition
apply
Firstly
, the used Linking Words
bottles
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collected
into a container Add a missing verb
are collected
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then
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and then
enter
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entered
to
the next step Change preposition
into
purification
. In Change preposition
of purification
this
step, the unnecessary materials are Linking Words
removing
from the Wrong verb form
removed
glass
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bottles
and Use synonyms
left
the clean materials, Verb problem
apply
then
the pure Linking Words
glass
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bottles
can be Use synonyms
proceed
cut the Verb problem
apply
glass
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bottles
using Use synonyms
optoelectronic
system. Correct article usage
an optoelectronic
Furthermore
, the material Linking Words
insert
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inserts
to
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into
vessel
to continue Add an article
the vessel
a vessel
process
of cycling Add an article
the process
Correct word choice
and caled
caled
cullet melting to make Correct your spelling
called
material
elaborate. Correct article usage
the material
Finally
, the materials Linking Words
ready
to shape again Add a missing verb
are ready
accordingly
. Now, the Linking Words
glass
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bottles
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ready
to use as a new product.Add a missing verb
are ready
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words glass, bottles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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