The diagram below illustrates the recycling process of discarded glass bottles. Provide a summary of the information by mentioning the main features and make appropriate comparisons wherever relevant.

The diagram below illustrates the recycling process of discarded glass bottles. Provide a summary of the information by mentioning the main features and make appropriate comparisons wherever relevant.
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The diagram provides information about how discarded
glass
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bottles
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recycle
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are recycled
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.
Overall
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, there are 3 stages of recycling
of
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apply
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glass
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bottles
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,
including
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apply
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collection, purification and forming.
Firstly
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, the used
bottles
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collected
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are collected
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into a container
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then
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and then
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enter
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entered
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to
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into
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the next step
purification
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of purification
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. In
this
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step, the unnecessary materials are
removing
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removed
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from the
glass
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bottles
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and
left
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apply
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the clean materials,
then
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the pure
glass
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bottles
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can be
proceed
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apply
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cut the
glass
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bottles
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using
optoelectronic
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an optoelectronic
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system.
Furthermore
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, the material
insert
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inserts
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to
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into
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vessel
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the vessel
a vessel
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to continue
process
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the process
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of cycling
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and caled
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caled
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called
cullet melting to make
material
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the material
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elaborate.
Finally
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, the materials
ready
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are ready
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to shape again
accordingly
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. Now, the
glass
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bottles
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ready
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are ready
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to use as a new product.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words glass, bottles with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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