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The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit

The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit
#information #travel #uk #countries #residents #visit
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The chart illustrates the data about
traveling
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travelling
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 to and from the
UK
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as well as
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 about the most famous nations for
UK
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residents
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 to visit.
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, the
visits
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number of visits
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 to the
UK
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 by overseas
residents
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 was 10 to 25
million
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 from 1979 to 1999.
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, the
visits
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number of visits
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 abroad by
UK
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residents
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 was 11 to 52
million
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 from 1979 to 1999.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
most
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the most
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 famous nations visited by
UK
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nationalists
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 in 1999 was
total
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a total
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6
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of 6
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.
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, the
nationalists
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 visited
the
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apply
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turkey
was
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2
million
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. Meanwhile, the
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residents
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number of residents
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visited
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who visited
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the
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apply
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Greece was approximately 3
million
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.
Moreover
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, the
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residents
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number of residents
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visited
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who visited
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 the USA
was
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were
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 4
million
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.
In addition
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 to that, the
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residents
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number of residents
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visited
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who visited
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 Spain was 9
million
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.
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, the
nationalists
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visited
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who visited
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the
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apply
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France
was
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were
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 more than 10
million
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. In conclusion, the above chart and graph
shows
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show
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that
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apply
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how
much
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many
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uk
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UK
residents
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visits
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visit
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 abroad and how many overseas
visited
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visit
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UK
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the UK
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.
As well as
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 the most
well know
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well-known
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 countries visited by
UK
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nationalists
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 in 1999
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, residents, million, nationalists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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