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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries.

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries.
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of Australian goods which sold to four countries.
Overall
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, China demonstrated gradual growth over the period.
On the other hand
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, other nations showed fluctuations, but these
observed
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 less
at
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in
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 Japan than
others
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. India exported 5% in 1990 and it decreased
little
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 in 1995.
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,
this
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 fall continued
to
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until
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 2000 and from that year
indication
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 of India started increasing until 2010. In 2012, it went down 5% again.
Numbers
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of
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 Japan was approximately 2% in 1990 and increased
3
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% in 1995 and reached 5% after 5 years. From 2005 to 2012, it went up sharp and was nearly 37%.
US
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 was the most
fluctuated
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 country between them. In 1995, its score was 12% and
then
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 diminished
8
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%.
However
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, it increased
12
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% and commenced declining. In 2010, it was 5%
,
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 and reached 12% two years later. Japan indicated a stable
decreasing
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 and lost around 10% over the years.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • exports
  • timeline
  • analyze
  • significant increase/decrease
  • trade relationships
  • economic dependencies
  • stability
  • fluctuation
  • political events
  • Country A/B/C/D
  • trends
  • insights
  • compare/comparison
  • examine
  • reveal
  • indicate
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