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The graph below shows the percentage of GDP government spending on health, education and road & railways from 2000 to 2025 in a particular country.

The graph below shows the percentage of GDP government spending on health, education and road & railways from 2000 to 2025 in a particular country.
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The line graph
illustates
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illustrates
 the
expenditures
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expenditure
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of
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on
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 health ,
education
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 and road
developments
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development
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 on
government
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the government
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 from 2000 to 2025.
Overall
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 ,government pay more attention
about
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to
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health
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the health
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sectore
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sector
sectors
, it can be seen
upward
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an upward
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 trend all over the period
while
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 other
sectores
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sectors
were
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dramatically changed between 2000 to 2025. Beginning of the year ,
government
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the government
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 spent
majority
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the majority
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for
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on
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education
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 and it remained constant
2005
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from 2005
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 to 2010 , but it
was
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dropped slightly. After 2010
education
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 4.0%sector expenditures declined 4.0% .
reseverd
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reserved
 money for
education
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 increased since 2005 , it was
flucationed
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auctioned
 gradually
while
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approxiamately
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approximately
 got 4.0%.
Healt departement
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Health department
 earmarked for
spent
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spending
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majority
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the majority
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 of GDP whole the time period.
Therefore
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, it
was
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reached a peak over proportion
6.0
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of 6.0
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 .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
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