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The plane below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment

#plane #show #site #airport #redevelopment
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The plan depicts the layout of an
airport
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 now,
besides
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, the predicted picture of the same
airport
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 after
one year
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 reconstruction plan will be
finshed
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finished
. By and large,
in addition
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 to more than double
number
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the number
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 of gates, that will be added. There will be an
an
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additional
amneties
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amenities
,
such
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 as an old fashion
walk way
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walkway
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,
that is
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 going to be exchanged by a sky train. In
term
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terms
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 of the current design of the involved
airport
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. Obviously, in the departure area, there
are
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is
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 a
check point
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checkpoint
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 and a cafe. The following stages are a security
,
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 and a passport centre. To be ended with the walkway , and 8 gates,
whereas
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, in the arrival venue of the
airport
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, there
are
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is
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 merely a passport centre and a custom.
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, the intended layout of
this
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airport
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 will be expanded dramatically.
In other words
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, bag drops and shops will be located at the departure.
Furthermore
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, passengers will be transported to the 18 gates by a sky train.
Moreover
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, a car hire, an ATM and a new cafe, all will be added to the arrival location.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that all sections of the essay are clearly defined with appropriate headings or paragraphs.
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Try to develop your points more thoroughly with detail and evidence to strengthen your response.
coherence cohesion
Work on crafting a stronger introduction and conclusion to frame your main points effectively.
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There is a good attempt at describing both the current and future layout of the airport, comparing changes effectively.
coherence cohesion
The essay logically breaks down different components of the airport's design, which helps in organizing the response.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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