jan,,,The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

jan,,,The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table depicts how many people by their
age
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in 2011 and 2012 in New Zealand.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the population increased
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there was a decline in the
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of under 15 and aged 15 to 39 but an increase in the other two groups. Looking in more detail, the population of New Zealand stood at 4.381.269 in 2011, which increased by 0.6% to 4.410.284 in 2012.
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, the communities in the category of under 15 and 15-19 declined at the same rate of 0.2%, from 898.160 and 1.577.256 to 896.364 and 1.574.102, respectively.
On the other hand
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, the remaining two categories rose during the same period.
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the total number of the 65+
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group
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was the smallest figure in both years,
this
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group
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recorded an increase of 4% from 573.946 to 596.903, becoming the highest increase among all
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categories.
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, the
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of 40-64 ages noted 1.331.907 in 2011 and 1.339.898 in 2012, showing the same percentage of change as
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the total population, at 0.6%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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