Universities should accept equal number of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is thought by some,
colleges
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could accept
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proportion of men and women who pursue
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education in all of the
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fields
. I totally disagree with
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statenment
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and I will mention some reasons for
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topic. One of the crucial
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issue is that some sociality
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for men and it is only fair to say that just men will be
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a qualification
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qualification
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in
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these specializations.
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, in some societies
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engendering
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heavy
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as wood and iron
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female
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can
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not
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subject.
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, there are some higher education that are
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functions and
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for women and girls what is more
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subject will be
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for
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males
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. Another point for
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statenment
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is that
,
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accepting
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fee
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fees
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of
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male
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males
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and
female
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females
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can be effective
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reducing the number of people who
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the competition in different categories of subjects.
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, sport is one of the foremost disputed
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throughout the world
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boys are more talented than lass in many specific sports like play
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football
, Wrestling and Weightlifting. In
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, there are cited reasons that I
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, the proportion of socialities are for a specific gender
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in fair areas and universities
accpecting
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accepting
equal percentage of male and female is would be inaccessible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • diversity
  • inclusivity
  • balanced
  • learning environment
  • opportunities
  • perspectives
  • gender stereotypes
  • fairness
  • equal opportunities
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