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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents for instance sports or music and others are not. however, it is sometimes claimed that any children can be thaught to become a good sports person or musician. discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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It is widely believed that some
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 are born with talents,
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 others come into
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 world without any inherent abilities.
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, it is
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 argued that
people
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 without natural talent can develop
skills
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 through hard work and practice. I believe that without experience, no one can be successful in a given area. Some
people
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 are born with natural
skills
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, and every individual has their own talents.
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, a person may be naturally gifted in sports and excel quickly in
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 area.
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, talented individuals can steadily improve their
skills
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 in a particular domain.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 are born without natural talent, but they can still develop
skills
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 in various areas and achieve success.
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, a group of
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 may want to learn art, and with hard work and self-belief, they can reach their goal.
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 talented individuals may learn quickly,
people
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 without natural talent can still succeed through consistent effort and skill improvement.
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, anyone can become great at something through dedication and hard work. In conclusion, considering everything mentioned, I would argue that anyone with self-belief and determination can achieve their goals in any field.

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Task Achievement
Enhance your examples by providing more specific and varied instances to strengthen your argument, particularly in the sections discussing talent and learnability.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to elaborate more on how each point connects back to your opinion. This will help in ensuring that your main argument is consistently supported throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction clearly sets up the two contrasting views and states your opinion, providing a clear road map for the reader.
Task Achievement
You have effectively presented the idea that people can succeed without innate talent through hard work, addressing both sides of the prompt.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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