Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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of individuals in our society support the view that even though a

person

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is not making

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amount of salaries or

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pleased with the job they do, blaming

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that situation is unnecessary and the best option is to approve that condition.

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opinion, every

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has to increase their

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standards and reach their full potential in their

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. On one hand, not every

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in our community has the ability to graduate from a university or get a high level of education in their academic career and

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that some people have to work in jobs that don't require a significant level of education

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as waiters and factory employees.Because of the salary they make it is really difficult for them to look after their family and reach a quality

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money they make is not enough for them and in that

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their

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standards are declining.

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impossible for them.

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, even if a

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doesn’t have the educational ability to work in a high position in a company, there are still some particular ways for that individual to become a successful and rich

person

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,we can see that some

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owners in the world

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university diploma but

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significant

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amount of financial status.Most of them realize their potential

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that sector and start their own

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,even though some of them

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that journey with

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budget their

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improved massively in the

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days.

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can inspire the people

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currently

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poor position and help them to understand the statement that if they believe in their skills and show their 100% in their

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journey they could achieve their dream goals.

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task achievement

Ensure that each paragraph focuses clearly on one main idea and that this idea is clearly developed.

coherence cohesion

Strive to connect ideas even more smoothly by using a variety of linking words and phrases, and check sentence structures for grammar accuracy.

introduction conclusion present

Add a brief conclusion to summarize your points and clearly express your own stance on the issue.

relevant specific examples

Provided relevant examples to support ideas, like referencing business owners without university diplomas.

task achievement

Displayed a good balance between discussing both views and providing examples.

introduction conclusion present

Introduction clearly outlines both viewpoints to be discussed.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

302 words

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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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