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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption ofenergy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the main features,andmake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption ofenergy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the main features,andmake comparisons where relevant.
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The presented line graph represents the units of
enery
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energy
 which have been utilized by individuals in The United States from 1980 with the prediction in 2030. In the big picture, it is conspicuous that the most popular
enery
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energy
entry
 consumed in the observed years is petrol and oil.
In addition
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, the projection reports that
this
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 energy will remain
the
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in the
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 same place
at
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as
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 the first energy chosen by society. In detail,
comparing
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 to the top three energy sold, petrol oil dominated others by starting at 35 and increased gradually
untill
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until
 the end of the shown period.
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 petrol and oil, coal
also
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 had the same pattern trend and reached a peak at the
last
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 predicted year (25).
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, natural gas commenced at 5 higher than coal,
then
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 inclined to 25 before remaining constant around 28. Turning to the rest of the categories, all of them were sold at the same level at just below 5,
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, only hydropower had
the
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a
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 constant number until 2030, with a few
fluctuated
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trend
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trends
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 from 1990 to 2010.
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, there is a slight growth for both energies, namely nuclear and solar.
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