The pie charts below present the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

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, we can see that the percentage of sales in film/music stores has increased over the years

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12%.

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a lower scale, clients from

book stores

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bookstores

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from 2003 to 2013 have

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3%.

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, there number of customers

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clothes

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decreased,

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it started at 24% and ended up at 16% in the

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year. In a similar way, clients from

travell

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travel

shops dropped from 36% to 29%.

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, from 2003 to 2013 the total percentage

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changed, because before more people were buying things for their trips and now they are buying movies and music. After taking all the details, we can conclude that the majority of customers from the online shopping sector in

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sectors in New Zealand buy in travel stores.

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The pie charts below present the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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In the near future nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

should long term jobseekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they can give something back to the community ?