Influence of human beings on the worlds ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loos of bio diversity. What are the primary causes of bio diversity? What solution can you suggest?

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Recent advancement in the fields of science and technology has many negative impacts on the environment and
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on its living beings. It has led to the alterations of the ecosystem which in turn, has reduced its biodiversity. There are several causes of it,
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it can be partially reversed by
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taking proper measures on time. There are several factors responsible for
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environmental changes.
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, the mass urbanization and industrialisation have caused significant deforestation, which has destructive effects on the ecosystem.it is directly responsible for
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climate change.
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, deforestation of Amazon's rainforest is a major cause of global warming and ecosystem change. It
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impacts the
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breeding and migration patterns.
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of chemical fertilizers, and industrial waste spillage into the water has destroyed the water life. Aquatic life is getting destroyed because of these toxins.
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, the cultivation of the same crops repeatedly and the
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of strong pesticides not only targets the non-targeted species
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the biodiversity. There are many ways to cope with these above-mentioned issues.
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establishing and effectively managing national parks like Lake District in England.It helps to preserve the natural environment which is a key to keeping endangered species safe.
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, reforestation should be promoted.
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can be done by creating awareness about the dangers of the exploitation of the natural habitat of animals and other creatures in schools and other educational institutions.
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, there should be a ban on the
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of strong chemicals and pest-killing solutions on
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plants .
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trees to create more land for industries and domestic
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other problems. These problematic impacts can be lessened by more plantations of trees, preservation of the national parks and decreased
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of harmful materials on crops .
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Consider developing your ideas further to fully explore the complexity of the topic. This might include discussing additional causes or providing more detailed solutions.
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Improve the logical flow between paragraphs and ideas. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects to the main argument.
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The introduction and conclusion are effectively included, allowing the essay to feel complete and orderly.
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You have provided relevant examples, such as the deforestation of the Amazon, which significantly strengthens your argument.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Biodiversity
  • Extinction
  • Ecosystem
  • Species
  • Habitat
  • Loss
  • Degradation
  • Climate change
  • Invasive
  • Pollution
  • Overexploitation
  • Awareness
  • Education
  • Poaching
  • Illegal wildlife trade
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