The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided table illustrates the global rate of laptop market shares held by manufacturers, surveyed within 2 specific years, namely, 2006 and 2007.
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, the predominant position
initially
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belonged to HP,
whereas
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its opposition could clearly be seen in Fujitsu-Siemens.
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,
this
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trend remained untouched 1 year later. Between the market's dominator and subordinate, emerged 5 different brands
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one sector categorized as "others" whose proportions started at 22.8%, but later declined to only about 19.3%. An amount of decency was shown by Dell, yet not enough in order to exceed, let alone surpass that of 'HP',
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, remaining in 2nd place. Moving on, evidently was a similarity
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'Toshiba' and 'Lenovo''s trend of fluctuation , varying from 6% to 7%.
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, 'Samsung' is the third largest contribution owner, with each statistic overtaking the 10% mark.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • market share
  • percentage points
  • market presence
  • ranking
  • market leader
  • least market share
  • total market share
  • market consolidation
  • market diversification
  • new entrants
  • exits
  • highlight
  • compare
  • decline
  • increase
  • improvement
  • loss of ground
  • manufacturer
  • worldwide
  • notebook computer
  • notable
  • significant
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