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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

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The bar chart illustrates the difference in the percentage of city residents who bought and drank
coffee
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 and tea in the
last
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 4 weeks in five Australian
cities
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. In
Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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, there were many similarities. The percentage of residents buying fresh
coffee
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 was similar, at just below 35%, both of which were lower than buying
instant
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coffee
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 and going to a
cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or tea. The gap between buying
instant
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coffee
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 and going to a
cafe
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 was small in both
cities
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, less than 5%, but the proportion in
Brisbane
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 outnumbered
Adelaide
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.
However
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, the situation in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart was different from
Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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. It was obvious that the gap between buying
instant
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coffee
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 and going to a
cafe
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 was over 7% in the three
cities
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, where the proportion of citizens going to a
cafe
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 was the largest, at more than 60%. Similar to
Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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, the percentage of buying fresh
coffee
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 was
also
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 the lowest in the 3
cities
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, but all were over 35%, higher than
Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 in the five
cities
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, more dwellers chose to go to a
cafe
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 than buy
instant
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 and fresh
coffee
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, except for
Adelaide
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cities, brisbane, adelaide, instant, cafe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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