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The bar graph shows the percentage growth in average properly prices in three diferent countries between 2007 and 2010. Summarize the infomration by selecting and reporting the key main features, and make comparison where relavant.

The bar graph shows the percentage growth in average properly prices in three diferent countries between 2007 and 2010. Summarize the infomration by selecting and reporting the key main features, and make comparison where relavant.
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The bar graph given illustrates the proportion rise in the mean
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property
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prices
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 in
Algeria
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,
China
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,and Argentina from 2007 to 2010.
Overall
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,
Algeria
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 started with having the highest percentage in the average
prices
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,but experienced a decline throughout the time period,
while
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 the proportion of the
prices
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 in
China
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 started with having the lowest,
however
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, the
prices
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 increased sharply making
China
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 the country with the highest proportion of
prices
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.
On the other hand
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,
Argentina
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Argentina's
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prices
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 fluctuated during the time period examined. In 2007,the percentage of
prices
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 in
Algeria
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 and
China
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 were more than 6.0% and 2.0% respectively.
Algeria
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 experienced a dramatic decrease in the rate of
prices
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 reaching 4.5% in 2008.
Whereas
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China
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China's
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 price rates rose significantly reaching more than 4.0% in 2008.
Algeria
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's percentage in
prices
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 kept on declining reaching 3.0% in 2010;
however
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,
China
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's
prices
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 grew,where they went over 6.0%.
On the other hand
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, Argentina's price rates fluctuated throughout the years.In 2007, the average
prices
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 were slightly over 3.0%,afterwards they experienced an upward trend reaching just over 4.5% in 2008.Yet the rate decreased dramatically reaching slightly over 1.0% in 2009.
Nevertheless
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, the rate increased suddenly reaching above 2.0%
at the end
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 of the period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, algeria, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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