Nowadays an increasing number of people change their careers during their work life period. What are the reasons behind this trend? Is it a generally positive or negative development?

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In recent times
individuals
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making changes in their occupation
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still in active service have increased
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the
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of the quest to earn better
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,
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contrary
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this
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move has fewer benefits and more drawbacks as
individuals
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might lack adequate skill in the new profession. These days
individuals
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are moving from one occupation to another owing to the
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that of earning
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better pay.
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, people leave less lucrative ones, and they take up that which will fetch them more funds.
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is done in other that they meet their financial obligations.
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, my cousin, who read English education
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the university, switched to information technology in light of the
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that the pay is
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higher
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,
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, abandoning his certificate in English education.
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, the quest to earn more money could make one leave one career path for another.
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,
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changing occupation trend generally has more downsides than upsides.
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is owing to the
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that people do not have
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knowledge in the field, and it could hinder their efficiency. Meaning
individuals
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would have to learn on the job to become efficient.
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, an individual who studied Arts at the university, but
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to take up a job in a bank because of better pay would ought to start learning the process involved in banking, and
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can impair productivity.
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, the drawbacks of changing
career
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are more than the benefits. In conclusion, the quest to earn more money propels people to change their career paths whilst in active service. On
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the
whole it seems that the drawback aspects of
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trend
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the beneficial ones, as these
individuals
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understand little or nothing about the profession they are venturing into.
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