The line graph shows the proportion of total exports of clothing in 4 countries in 2000 and 2014.

The line graph shows the proportion of total exports of clothing in 4 countries in 2000 and 2014.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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of total
exports
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of clothing in 4 countries in 2000 and 2014.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the quantity of
exports
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in Asia, the USA, European Union went down,
whereas
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China’s
exports
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increased. As the graph shows, the
number
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of China selling overseas in 2000 was 14
million
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exports
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,
however
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, the figure went up sharply without dropping until it reached approximately 37
million
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exports
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in 2014. The European Union sold around 30 and 35
million
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clothing abroad in 2000,
while
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the index decreased slowly and in 2002
exports
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number
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was 32
million
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. The figure continued dropping until it reached 23
million
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exports
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in 2010.
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, the index fell slightly and in 2014 the
number
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of
exports
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in the European Union was 21
million
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. Asia’s
exports
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in 2000 were 30
million
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,
however
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, it dropped sharply to 18
million
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in 2002 and from 2002 to 2004 the index did not change,
moreover
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, the
number
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rose slowly to 20
million
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until 2014.
Finally
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, the
last
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country is the USA. Starting from 2000 USA exported 11
million
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of clothing and in 2002 the
number
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did not change, but it dropped slowly until it reached 8
million
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in 2008. The figure went up for a bit to 9
million
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in 2010 but from 2010 to 2014 export numbers went down to 6
million
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.
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