The line graph illustrates the amount of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007, in grams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the amount of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007, in grams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart compares the consumption of three types of spreads ( Margarine, Butter, Low fat & reduced spreads) between 1981 and 2007. As reflected by the Yaxis, the units were measured in
grams
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. At first glance, it can be seen that butter was the most consumed
spread
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in 1981, followed by Margarine. Having said that, these two spreads were least consumed in the end.
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Low fat & reduced spreads saw a sharp rise in 2001,
at the end
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of the period, it became the maximum eaten
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. On the one hand, butter was highly consumed among all three spreads in the first year, with just over 140
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it grew modestly and hit a peak at nearly 160
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in 1996.
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, it experienced a downward trend and reached 50
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in 2007, being the second most used
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. Margarine
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followed a similar pattern but with slight fluctuations, it started at 90
grams
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in the first year and dropped by 10 points in 1986.
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, before undergoing the fall, it levelled off at 100
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from 1991 to 1996, becoming the lowest consumed
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.
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, low fat and reduced spreads were not introduced until 1996, it enjoyed a sharp rise and hit a high at nearly 90
grams
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in 2001, before dropping to 70
grams
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in the
last
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year,
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words grams, spread with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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