It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in your neighborhood. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a restaurant nearby? Do you support or oppose this plan? Why?

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restaurant
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my neighbourhood.
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with leaving genuine support and reason Moving towards the advantage it can bring, it would be easy to go for dine-in by saving
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location.
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getting hungry but having no mood for visiting eateries, it will save
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through their online services.
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food outlet would be beneficial
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location and will get some fresh , hot and desirable food within moments. So it would give plenty of pleasure
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behind good ratings for
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the restaurant
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. On the disadvantage side, we will be
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affected by overcrowding on weekends . People living in
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area would like to prefer
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restaurant
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frequently to save
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, it can
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affect other
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economies .
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make people lazy and shrink their exploration towards choices available.
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, I personally think it would be
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in mind that everyone should
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focus on expanding or exploring new destinations for food rather than keeping
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure a clearer structure in your paragraphs. Introduce a clear main idea at the start of each paragraph to guide the reader.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your arguments, especially in the sections discussing disadvantages.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that your conclusion summarizes the main points clearly and leaves a strong impression. It should not introduce new ideas but should reinforce your position.
Task Achievement
The essay addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of having a restaurant nearby, which fulfills the task requirements.
Task Achievement
You have included a personal opinion and provided a rationale for your viewpoint, which adds depth to the discussion.
Coherence & Cohesion
The conclusion ties back to the main points discussed, reflecting good structure.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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