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Development of The Village of Ryemouth between 1995 and Present.

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The pictures are compared between the area since 1995 and the recent area. It mostly shows the evolution of the building in each space. In the waterside and land space, both are changed in each location by settling and replacing the objects in their space from the past year. Recently
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the northeast side of the city had replaced the farmland and the forest park lag settled the golf and tennis counts. lover from
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 site, nearby the hotel had appeared
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 and moved to shop out and cover it by the restaurant
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, the nearby side of the beach had removed the fishing port on
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 day, by the way, it had developed in each Land and water.
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Clarify the introduction to clearly establish the main focus of the essay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph logically follows from the previous one to improve overall flow.
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Include a conclusion to summarize the main points and provide closure to the essay.
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Expand on specific changes with clearer examples to support your points.
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Avoid overly complex sentences which may confuse the reader. Opt for clarity.
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You accurately identified the significant changes in the village.
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The essay provides a comparison over time, showcasing the evolution effectively.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban development
  • Infrastructure
  • Residential area
  • Commercial district
  • Public amenities
  • Greenery
  • Renovation
  • Expansion
  • Demolition
  • Construction
  • Accessibility
  • Public transport
  • Urbanization
  • Evolution
  • Gentrification
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