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Band 5

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no denying the fact that saving
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environment
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the environment
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 is crucial to
maintain
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maintaining
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 sustainability.
While
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 it is a commonly held belief that government and institutions are responsible
on
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for
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 having a green planet, there is
also
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 an argument that opposes it. As we all know
that
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apply
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governments play an essential role
on
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in
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 saving
planet
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the planet
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 by imposing regulations and fines.
However
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,
also
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 Individuals have to be aware
on
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of
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 the importance of improving
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environment
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the environment
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.
In other words
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, there are several ways that
people
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 have to implement in order to enjoy a clean and healthy
surrounding
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surroundings
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such
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 as
recycle
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recycling
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. Recycling is one way that ensure the sustainability of
earth
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the earth
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.
People
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 have to be committed
on
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to
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 using recycle bins and
limit
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limiting
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 their usage of materials that harm
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environment
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the environment
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. Another point to consider, constructing
an industrial areas
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industrial areas
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 far away from cities can help
in enhancing
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enhance
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 life on
earth
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Earth
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.
Moreover
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,
Factories
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Factory
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 waste cause
negative
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a negative
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 impact on the quality of air. Air pollution, climate change and global warming are examples of
enviromental
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environmental
 issues that happening recently.
People
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 must limit their usage of cars and replace them with bicycles so that they diminish the negative effects. In
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addition
addtion
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addition
,
people
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 must raise
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awareness
awarness
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awareness
 in
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the community
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community
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the community
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.
For example
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, Omniya is
Kuwaiti
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a Kuwaiti
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 non-profit firm that
raise
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raises
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awarness
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awareness
 on the negative impact of plastics by managing events
on
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in
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 schools and public places
as well as
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 encouraging
people
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 to gather plastics and throw
it
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them
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 in recycle pins.
To conclude
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, I think even
that
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though
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goverments
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governments
 and firms have a stronger role in society,
people
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 have to cooperate with each other and raise
awarness
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awareness
on
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of
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 the importance of having a healthy
environment
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 so that they can live safely on earth.

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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by organizing the points more clearly in separate paragraphs. For instance, you could dedicate one paragraph to how individuals can contribute and another to the role of governments and companies.
coherence cohesion
Enhance coherence by using linking words and phrases more effectively to connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
Expand on your ideas with more detailed explanations and examples. For instance, you could provide a specific example of a government initiative that has effectively improved the environment.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in clearly framing the argument.
task achievement
You have provided relevant and specific examples, like mentioning Omniya, to support your points.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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