Many people believe that global warming is the biggest environmental issue. others argue that deforestation has a more severe impact. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In our contemporary world, it is often claimed that global warming is the most
concering
environmental problem, Correct your spelling
concerning
while
others think that Linking Words
deforestation
is even more dangerous for the Use synonyms
environment
. Use synonyms
This
essay will discuss both perspectives and explain why I think global warming has Linking Words
more
negative Add an article
a more
affect
on the Correct your spelling
effect
environment
.
Supporters of global warming argue that global warming significantly Use synonyms
reduce
biodiversity.
Change the verb form
reduces
This
Linking Words
because
increasing in Add a missing verb
is because
temperuture
, which results in melting the ice in Correct your spelling
temperature
the
Antarctica.
Correct article usage
apply
Resently
, Many countries have been facing Correct your spelling
Recently
heatwaves
because of global warming. Correct your spelling
heat waves
For example
, many people have suffered many Linking Words
disease
from severe Change to a plural noun
diseases
temperature
. Global warming Fix the agreement mistake
temperatures
contribute
to many natural Change the verb form
contributes
disaster
Change the noun form
disasters
such
as wildfires and storms, Linking Words
threating
both animals' and humans' Correct your spelling
threatening
lifes
.
Correct your spelling
lives
On the other hand
, others believe that Linking Words
deforestation
Use synonyms
cause
more Replace the word
causes
Correct your spelling
risks
riskes
Correct your spelling
risks
Change preposition
to
for
the Change preposition
to
environment
because it could Use synonyms
Correct your spelling
affect
effect
the crops. Correct your spelling
affect
For example
, Linking Words
deforestation
Use synonyms
reduce
the crops, leading to food Change the verb form
reduces
secure
Replace the word
security
problem
. Fix the agreement mistake
problems
For example
, many Linking Words
region
in Africa have been facing Change to a plural noun
regions
hanger
Correct your spelling
hunger
due to
Linking Words
the
Correct article usage
apply
deforestation
.
Use synonyms
In addition
, Linking Words
deforestation
may cause animal extinction, to illustrate Use synonyms
deforestation
has significantly mitigated Use synonyms
animals
habitats so it Change noun form
animals'
animal's
threate
their life.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
threaten
threatens
threat
while
Linking Words
deforestation
has severe drawbacks Use synonyms
on
the Change preposition
to
environment
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
food
Change preposition
as food
secure
and Replace the word
security
animals
Fix the agreement mistake
animal
extiction
, I believe that global warming has more downsides Correct your spelling
extinction
on
the Change preposition
to
environments
in terms of natural Fix the agreement mistake
environment
disaster
and Fix the agreement mistake
disasters
reduce
biodiversity.Wrong verb form
reduced
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task achievement
Ensure to elaborate more on your supporting points and examples to provide a fuller picture. For instance, when discussing how global warming affects biodiversity, you might want to include specific examples of species affected or the extent of the impact.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving sentence structure and grammar for better clarity and fluidity in conveying ideas. Some sentences were fragmented or needed clearer connections between thoughts.
coherence cohesion
You have a good introduction and conclusion, but between these, make sure the paragraphs flow smoothly from one to another. This can be achieved by using more transitional words and linking phrases.
task achievement
You clearly responded to both sides of the prompt, giving insight into each viewpoint.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion strongly framed your essay, providing a clear stance and summarizing effectively.
task achievement
The essay met the task through thoughtful discussion of each view on global warming and deforestation.
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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