In a number of countries, some people think it’s necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
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do
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confortable
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government
spend transportation Correct article usage
the government
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parts
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task response
Ensure that your introduction sets a clear framework for the rest of the essay, and your conclusion should summarize and reflect on the main points discussed, ensuring alignment.
coherence and cohesion
Work on connecting ideas more effectively. Using linking words and transitions can help clarify the relationship between concepts and arguments.
task response
While examples provided are relevant, ensure they clearly support and are directly linked to the points being argued in each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Develop each main point thoroughly and ensure that each point logically follows from the one before.
task achievement
The essay presents both sides of the argument regarding the investment in fast train lines versus current public transport improvement.
task achievement
The personal opinion is clear and consistent with the arguments presented.
coherence and cohesion
Real-life examples are utilized to reinforce and illustrate points, such as the situation in Azerbaijan and Tallinn.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite