In a number of countries, some people think it’s necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In many
countries
Use synonyms
,
people
Use synonyms
argue that the governments should expend lots of
money
Use synonyms
to build new railway paths to make
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
travels
Fix the agreement mistake
travel
show examples
faster between different cities,
while
Linking Words
others do not agree with
this
Linking Words
opinion, since they think
this
Linking Words
money
Use synonyms
should be spent on enhancing the current public
transport
Use synonyms
. Fast
transport
Use synonyms
might help us to reduce the amount of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
time that we spend on the way, I believe that everyday transportation is more
necessarily
Change the word
necessary
show examples
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
because we use it to go to
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
school, work, or other places more than
traveling
Change the spelling
travelling
show examples
. On the one hand, green travel
became
Wrong verb form
has become
show examples
more popular than past, and individuals
are tend
Change the verb form
tend
show examples
to use
Use synonyms
Correct article usage
the train
show examples
train
Fix the agreement mistake
trains
show examples
or
bus
Fix the agreement mistake
buses
show examples
more
oftenly
Correct your spelling
often
. It gives us an opportunity to be sustainable and
do
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
not waste our time. But these options might be longer than the plane travel.
Consequently
Linking Words
,
countries
Use synonyms
have started to construct fast
train
Use synonyms
lines between the cities, and even the
countries
Use synonyms
has
Change the verb form
have
show examples
started to push
people
Use synonyms
to be sustainable
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
and make
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
travel tickets affordable.
For example
Linking Words
, in Azerbaijan, flying from Nakhcivan to Baku takes 3 hours
while
Linking Words
it is 4 hours by
train
Use synonyms
with the 2 times cheaper ticket. So it gives incentives to
people
Use synonyms
to use the railways.
On the other hand
Linking Words
,
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
public
transport
Use synonyms
is the most common transportation as
everyone
Use synonyms
uses it in order to go to
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
school, work, or
hang-out
Correct your spelling
hang out
show examples
with friends. Public
transport
Use synonyms
is almost
cheaper
Correct article usage
a cheaper
show examples
option so it has to be available for
everyone
Use synonyms
. If busses,
tramvays
Correct your spelling
tramways
, or trolleybusses were enhanced for every location by governmental expenditure, it would be more
confortable
Correct your spelling
comfortable
for every member of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
society. In some
countries
Use synonyms
,
government
Correct article usage
the government
show examples
spend transportation
fee
Fix the agreement mistake
fees
show examples
from their own pocket
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
and
make
Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
public
transport
Use synonyms
free for
community
Add an article
the community
show examples
.
For example
Linking Words
, in Tallinn, public
transport
Use synonyms
is free for
everyone
Use synonyms
, and it has access to
the
Remove the article
apply
show examples
all
part
Fix the agreement mistake
parts
show examples
of the city. In summary,
while
Linking Words
spending
money
Use synonyms
on improving fast
train
Use synonyms
connection would make
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
people
Use synonyms
sustainable and help them to spend less time on the road, I believe officials should allocate much more
money
Use synonyms
for the current public
transport
Use synonyms
and make it available for
everyone
Use synonyms
.
Submitted by nazrin.ceferova on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Ensure that your introduction sets a clear framework for the rest of the essay, and your conclusion should summarize and reflect on the main points discussed, ensuring alignment.
coherence and cohesion
Work on connecting ideas more effectively. Using linking words and transitions can help clarify the relationship between concepts and arguments.
task response
While examples provided are relevant, ensure they clearly support and are directly linked to the points being argued in each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Develop each main point thoroughly and ensure that each point logically follows from the one before.
task achievement
The essay presents both sides of the argument regarding the investment in fast train lines versus current public transport improvement.
task achievement
The personal opinion is clear and consistent with the arguments presented.
coherence and cohesion
Real-life examples are utilized to reinforce and illustrate points, such as the situation in Azerbaijan and Tallinn.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • investment
  • urban mobility
  • commuters
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • accessibility
  • rejuvenate
  • cost-effective
  • traffic congestion
  • economic sustainability
  • tourism
What to do next:
Look at other essays: