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The graphs below show how people in a European city reached their office and got back home in 1959 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show how people in a European city reached their office and got back home in 1959 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts that are given illustrate the types of transportation among
the
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people
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in
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 reaching their offices and
got
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getting
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 back home in European
city
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cities
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 between 1959-2009.
Overall
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, there
are
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 a significant switch between transporting by car vs by
foot
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 over the years.
Also
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, there is an obvious
changes
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 in the average distance and duration. In 1959, the main way for the
people
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 to reach their office was by
foot
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 which
consider
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 more than
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half of the pie chart (55%).
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 that the train and bus were equal in
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usage (15%). the least
utulizing
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utilised
 by
people
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 were others and cars, respectively. In 2009, there were
a
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dramatic changes, especially between transporting by car and by
foot
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.
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, the percentage of
people
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 who
goes
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 to
the
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work
by
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on
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foot
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is
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 declined by
mostly
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the
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half to reach 25%.
On the other hand
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, the car took a place in being the top one with 25%
in
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 using it to reach work and go back home.
While
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 other categories in transportation had no crucial events neither in using it
,
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 nor in the changes that happened over the years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, foot with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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