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Nowadays university education is very expensive. Some people say that universities should reduce their fees, especially for the less fortunate students or those coming from rural areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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As we know nowadays education is very important for everyone. So now many students want to complete their study in the university or college. But
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 a problem that if you want to complete your
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 you have to pay too much money, it is so expensive. The universities must reduce fees for students for many reasons.
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, not everyone can pay that much money because they come from rural areas.
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, others do not have
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 universities. In my opinion, they have to reduce
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task achievement
Expand the argument by providing more detailed points and reasons. You should give examples or evidence to support your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Include a clear conclusion to summarize the points discussed and restate your opinion clearly in the essay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph develops a single idea coherently and use linking words to connect sentences and ideas fluently.
task achievement
You have identified a common problem with education costs, acknowledging its impact on less fortunate students or those from rural areas.
task achievement
The essay conveys a clear point of view in support of reducing university fees.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • lower-income backgrounds
  • social equity
  • student debt
  • financial liabilities
  • workforce
  • regional disparities
  • higher education
  • quality of education
  • university resources
  • government subsidies
  • scholarships
  • across-the-board
  • affordable education
  • economic benefits
  • educated workforce
  • societal challenges
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