The charts show the online sales for retail sectors in a South American country in 2009 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the online sales for retail sectors in a South American country in 2009 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two graphs provide a
proportion
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of information about online purchases in countries in South America during a specific period (2009-2019) in four different sectors: travel, clothes, books, and music\film. The online
sales
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for retail sectors in 2009 are illustrated in the first graph,
while
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the online
sales
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for retail sectors in 2019 are illustrated in the
second
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graph.
Overall
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, the
proportion
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of online
sales
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for retail is relatively variable for both the period 2009 and 2019. Turning to the first chart, we can observe that the most online
sales
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are travel at about more than one-third of the
proportion
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(38%), with clothes in
second
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place at just above a quarter of the
proportion
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(26%).
In contrast
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, the situation is significantly different in 2019. By taking a closer look at the
second
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chart, we can observe that
music\film
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music
is in first place at exactly one-third of the
proportion
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(33%),
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travel is in
second
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place at about (29%).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, sales, second with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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