The charts give information about music sales in a US music store in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give information about music sales in a US music store in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two graphs provide information about the
music
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purchases by genre in a musical American store during a specific period (1997 and 2017) in five different sectors: pop, rock, Latin, R&B and others. The
music
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sales
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in 1997 are illustrated in the first graph,
while
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the
music
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sales
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in 2007 are illustrated in the
second
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graph.
Overall
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, the
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of
the
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music
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sales
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is relatively variable for both the period 1997 and 2017. Turning to the first chart we can observe that most of the
sales
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are pop in about almost half of the
proportion
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(49%), with rock in
second
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place with almost a quarter of the
proportion
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(24%).
In contrast
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, the situation is significantly different in 2017. By taking a closer look at the
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chart, we can observe that R & B is in first place at just above one-third of the
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(34%),
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Latin is in
second
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place at about (24%).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words music, sales, second, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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