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The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens. Write a report for a university lecture describing the information below.

The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens. Write a report for a university lecture describing the information below.
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The two graphs provide information about the outgoings for people in the USA during a specific period (1966 and 1996) in seven various sectors: Foods,
Cars
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, Petrol, Restaurants, books, Furnitures and Computers. The
expenses
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 in 1966 are illustrated in the first
chart
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,
while
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 the
expenses
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 in 1996 are illustrated in the
second
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chart
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.
Overall
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, the
proportion
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 of
American
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expenses
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 is relatively variable for both periods 1966 and 1996. Turning to the first
chart
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, we can observe that most of the
expenses
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 by
American
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 citizens are on
Cars
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 about (44%) of the
proportion
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.
Whereas
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 Books and Restaurants are in
second
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 place with equal quantities for both of them (14%).
According to
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 the data,
Cars
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, Books, Restaurants and Computers are the most spending sectors among
American
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 citizens with more than three-quarters (77%).
In contrast
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, the situation is significantly disparate. By taking a closer look at the
second
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chart
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, we can observe that Food is in first place at about (45%) of the
proportion
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.
However
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,
Cars
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 are in
second
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 place at almost a quarter of the
proportion
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 (23%).
It is clear that
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Cars
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, Food and Furniture are the most spending sectors among
American
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 citizens with almost three-quarters (73%).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, expenses, chart, second, proportion, american with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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