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Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
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 contemporary epoch, technology is progressing at an exponential rate in the department of
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 some believe that online learning will substitute in-person classes very soon
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 its numerous advantages, others think that it is impossible to replace on-campus learning. I am in favour of the latter opinion, yet I will be shedding light on
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both
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. To
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 with, a section of society believes that e-learning will overtake traditional
education
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 in the coming future because of the more benefits that it has to offer
students
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. One of the most compelling
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 for
learner
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learners
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 to prefer online learning is
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convenience
. To elaborate,
students
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 all around the world can have access to all the digital
education
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 platforms and they can simply attend online classes from the comfort of their homes without the hassle of travelling long
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 to get to the educational institutes.
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,
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 who are willing to study with part-time
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 it is easier for them to plan and enroll
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 an online course where they can complete the program
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 their
convinence
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convenience
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, it
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, by some people that
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advantages like
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convenience
 traditional
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 of schooling will be replaced by online
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 of learning.
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, there are those who think that it is nearly difficult to replace conventional
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 things which cannot be done in e-learning
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 as giving immediate feedback, face-to-face interaction with teachers and peers,
access
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 to the facilities and structured environment created by
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the teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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 to
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 the needs
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 the
students
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. One more important thing is maintaining the discipline of the
students
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. To illustrate, a student who is physically present in the classroom
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 more discipline towards studies when compared to the student who is attending the course online.
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 is mainly because of the presence of a teacher in the classroom.
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, it is said that institution-based
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 is irreplaceable. To summarize, both
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views have
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 merits, but in my perspective, it is very
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difficult to replace on-campus
education
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 with online learning.

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task achievement
To improve task achievement, provide more specific examples to back up both viewpoints. Discuss real-world scenarios, statistics, or expert opinions to strengthen your argument.
task achievement
Ensure that your ideas are comprehensively explained. Some arguments could be more deeply elaborated to offer a complete picture. Consider providing more in-depth explanations for both the advantages and disadvantages discussed.
coherence cohesion
Enhance coherence by using more linking words. Using a variety of cohesive devices can aid in making your arguments flow better. Try incorporating words and phrases like 'furthermore,' 'however,' and 'on the other hand' where necessary.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-crafted, effectively setting up the essay's purpose and summarizing viewpoints.
task achievement
The essay presents a balanced discussion by addressing both sides of the argument. This is crucial for tackling the task effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-Learning
  • face-to-face education
  • remote learning
  • virtual classroom
  • webinar
  • digital platform
  • self-paced learning
  • interactive learning
  • course accessibility
  • academic networking
  • pedagogy
  • synchronous/asynchronous sessions
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • edtech (educational technology)
  • holistic development
  • practical skills
  • collaborative learning
  • digital divide
  • curriculum adaptation
  • technological literacy
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