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The map illustrates the changes in Stockford City in 1986 and present time. Summarize the key points and make comparison. Wite the essay in 150 words.

The map illustrates the changes in Stockford City in 1986 and present time. Summarize the key points and make comparison. Wite the essay in 150 words.
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Given are two maps illustrating the figures of
stokeford
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Stokeford
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 city in 1930 and 2010.
Overall
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 the city changed significantly with more houses expended,
removents
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and removents
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 of farmland. In 1930, houses
located
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were located
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 along the main road which
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was lincked
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lincked
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lined
 with
bridge
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a bridge
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, and farmland dominated most of
areas
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the areas
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. Shops, post office and primary school all
were
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on were
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 east side river.
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large
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a large
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 house
surrounded
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is surrounded
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 by gardens. Moving onto the map of
stokeford
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Stokeford
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 in 2010. More houses
construted
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constructed
 along the road, Large house and garden replaced by retirement home
infront
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in front
 of the ring road. Post office and primary school at the same location, but
primary
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the primary
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 school became
more
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apply
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bigger
size
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in size
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • modernization
  • infrastructure
  • development
  • expansion
  • urbanization
  • replacement
  • redevelopment
  • renovation
  • gentrification
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