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The table below shows the proportion of women in the labor force and women in management in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. (Thảo)

The table below shows the proportion of women in the labor force and women in management in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. (Thảo)
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woman
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women
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labor
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force
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countires
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countries
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, Japan has the proportion highest
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 Sri Lanka
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 lowest
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woman
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women
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Janpan
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Japan
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labour
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force
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 is 48
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United
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 States about 46
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per cent
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percentage of
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women
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acount
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account
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it
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five
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 countries. Egypt has
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women
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five
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countires
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countries
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 quite low
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as
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per cent
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labour
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 and 12
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percent
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per cent
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management
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. Australia and
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five
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 Japan is
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 only around 17
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percent
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police
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woman
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women
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, woman, force, management, five, labour, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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