The process diagram details the steps by which liquid chocolate is produced from cocoa beans. Provide an overview of the information by identifying and describing the key details, and include comparisons where appropriate. Dũng

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The diagram illustrates how liquid

chocolate

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is produced from cocoa

beans

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As is shown in the picture,

chocolate

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production is an artificial process

liner

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to make sweet treats.It has 10 steps

start

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starting

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with

introduction

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the introduction

an introduction

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origin

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the origin

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and

Finish

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Finishing

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when the

chocolate

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is liquid.

First,

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cacao

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the cacao

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tree is one of the most important

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apply

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chocolate

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product

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products

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and it

grown

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is grown

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in South America Africa,

Indonesia

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and Indonesia

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. When

this

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tree has ripe red pods,

worker

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workers

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harvested

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harvest

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the cocoa white kernel. After that, it is incubated in banana leaves to become fermented

beans

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and

this

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process

helped

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the taste more natural and attractive. Next step,

beans

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are dried in the sun until dry,

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then

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and then

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they

put

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are put

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apply

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in large bags. Go through the transportation process by truck, they take it to

factory

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the factory

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and

beans

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roasted

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are roasted

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at 350 degrees. The maker divided it into two sides was crushed and filtered

outer

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the outer

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shell.

Finally

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, they pressed them into liquid form and got the expected results

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chocolate, beans with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

158 words

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The process diagram details the steps by which liquid chocolate is produced from cocoa beans. Provide an overview of the information by identifying and describing the key details, and include comparisons where appropriate. Dũng

Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large, extended family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?

You Are due to give a talk to you through about the danger of smoking, but you cannot now do so. Write a letter to the youth group leader, explain that you cannot come. Apologise for your absence. Suggest a new occasion.

You recently read an article in the newspaper about someone whom you know personally but have not heard from in a long time. You found that some of the information published was incorrect.