The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart provides key information about the five industries
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workforce between 1962 and 2012. The units are measured in the percentage.
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, it is clear from the graph that the peak percentage of
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Australian workforce in five industries is service and it has remained stable
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nearly 80 per cent in 2010.
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, mining was the minimal amount of the 5 productions remained at 1% but it was 0% first .
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what is shown, manufacturing was constant at 25% but it has fluctuated and plunged to 10%.
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52 percent in the beginning but it has soared from 52% to almost 80%. In terms the agriculture and construction they were equivalent in 1970 with a number of 10% until 1980 they were almost the same but, agriculture
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declined to 5 per cent in 1990
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1 percent by 2010 and
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construction was constant at 10% until 2010 .

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