Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to orwork in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the contemporary world, learning a foreign
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role in our lives since the world more and more globalization which is
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impotartant
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important
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a foreign
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but, outside of
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tongue, learning a new
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both
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hard and
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. Some
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say that one way go to
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country
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in order to
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,
others
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while others
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people
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argue that there are other options. Both of these views will be discussed in the following essay.
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with, the first opinion says that it is necessary to go to a foreign
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to learn a
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. Going to another
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to learn a
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is the fastest and most practical way because
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you
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practice
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with local
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therefore
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, you
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been
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more
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and listening.
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, you not only practice
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learn to culture of that
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cause
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you
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structure
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the structure
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of that
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better, because
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and culture are not independent from each other
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, you learn that
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and culture by experiencing it.
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also
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causes
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your
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you
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more effectively and it makes you not forget easily.
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, the second view argues that it is not the only option for learning the
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. With the development of technology even there
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been a lot of
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in order to learn
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such
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as
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Cambly, OpenEnglish, YouTube etc. You can practice
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one-on-one
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or with group courses even thanks to group courses you could meet many international individuals. Meeting
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at your own level motivates you
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, you learn new words from each other
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which
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to
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up your learning process.
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, these
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cheaper than
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to
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a foreign
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country
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so, you can learn a
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without having financial difficulties.
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,
although
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learning a
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has many difficulties there are many ways to learn. In my opinion,
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applications
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or
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courses are more
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than
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to
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foreign
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used many
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while
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learning a
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and took a
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course. With proper and consistent study, it is possible to learn a
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without going to another
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. It is always a great advantage to learn the
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in the
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where it is spoken but, not everyone has the opportunity to learn a
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in another
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hence
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,
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provide a great advantage.
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task achievement
Try to ensure that your ideas are fully developed and clearly articulated. While the essay presents a reasonable discussion on both viewpoints, elaborating slightly more on specific examples or arguments for each side can enhance clarity and completeness.
coherence cohesion
Work on refining paragraph transitions and better linking sentences to improve the logical flow of ideas throughout the essay. Although an attempt has been made, further practice could enhance the logical connections between ideas and paragraphs.
structure
The essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion, which provides a solid frame for your discussion.
task achievement
You present both perspectives on the topic and express your own opinion, fulfilling the task's requirements.
task achievement
Your use of real-world examples such as applications (Cambly, YouTube, etc.) adds relevance and specificity to your arguments.

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  • to illustrate
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