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Band 4

A building company is planning to build new houses on some land near where you live and has asked the people to give their comments. Write a letter to the manager of the building company and - Say how you heard about the plan of the building company - Give your opinion of the plan - Say what you hope the building company will do.

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Dear Manager,
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I

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 hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I want to express my opinions and suggestions on constructing new properties near my location which
majority
Correct article usage
the majority

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 of people
finding it
Wrong verb form
find

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 disadvantageous and devastating to
the
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apply

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nature.
To begin
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 with, the mass relocation of people would be the first negative impact we will face in
near
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the near

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 future once the
overall
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 project
get
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gets

The plural verb get does not appear to agree with the singular subject the overall project. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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 done.
Additionally
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, they will suffer
the
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apply

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noise pollution from the heavy
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment

It appears that equipments is an uncountable noun and should not be made plural. Consider changing the noun.

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 and
machinary
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machinery

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which might be fatal for senior citizens who are living in day-care places.
Moreover
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, the plaza near my place will be demolished which provides basic necessities to everyone for everyday purposes. in conclusion, I hope that your construction agency
would
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will

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 take the above reasons into consideration before implementing these drastic changes in our town. have a good one, Yours sincerely, Anmolpreet

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Task Response
Ensure relevance and support for each argument presented. The mention of demolishing a plaza could be expanded to explain its impact on the community.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use paragraphing effectively to separate different points such as the environmental impact and convenience issues faced.
Coherence and Cohesion
Start sentences with a capital letter and ensure the use of appropriate formal closing remarks such as 'Yours sincerely'.
Task Response
The writer clearly conveys their concern over the environmental impact and societal changes resulting from the construction project.
Coherence and Cohesion
Expresses understanding of community disruption, such as noise pollution affecting senior citizens.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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