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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture
decribes
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describes
 the production of instant noodles for sale.
Overall
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, the process is a closed-loop system consisting of eight stages, beginning with the making of
dough
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 and ending with ready products for sale. At the beginning of the process, flour
are
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is
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 taken by special vehicle from storage silos.
Next,
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it
mixed
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is mixed
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 with oil and water, and the finished
dough
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 is obtained. After that, the
dough
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 passes through rollers and
become
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becomes
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dough
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 sheets. In the next stage, the special equipment makes the
dough
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 strips and forms
circle
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circular
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 discs. The formed circle discs
cooking
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are cooking
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 in oil and drying. As soon as they are
dryed
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dried
, they put
it
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them
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to
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in
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 cups and
also
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, vegetables and spices. At the
of
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end of
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 the production, instant noodles are
labelling
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labelled
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 and
sealing
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sealed
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 in special equipment. Finished products
ready
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are ready
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 for delivery to shops.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dough with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 0 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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