The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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number
of Rentals and Use synonyms
sales
(in various formats) of films from a particular store from 2002 to 2011. Use synonyms
overall
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a downtrend
sales
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sales
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period
.
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the period
to
the detail of Rentals, Change preposition
at
started
from the highest Change the form of the verb
starting
number
almost to 200.000 Use synonyms
consistantly
dropped until the end of Correct your spelling
consistently
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period
in 2011 about more than 50.000. Add an article
the period
a period
Meanwhile
DVD Add a comma
Meanwhile,
sales
started from the Use synonyms
buttom
almost 50.000 rapidly climbed to 2005 and Correct your spelling
bottom
contine
depict fluctuation and Correct your spelling
continued
reach
the highest Wrong verb form
reached
number
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compare
to the others Wrong verb form
compared
in
the end of Change the preposition
at
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period
time.
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the period
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sales
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the
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apply
sales
and Use synonyms
significanly
dropped to 2005 and lost Correct your spelling
significantly
number
from 2006 to 2011, Use synonyms
continuesly
with Correct your spelling
continuously
continues
opposite
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an opposite
the opposite
sales
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showed
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the period
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