The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart
illustrate
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the annual
number
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of Rentals and
sales
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(in various formats) of films from a particular store from 2002 to 2011.
overall
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, rentals showed
downtrend
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a downtrend
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next VHS
sales
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and Blu-ray
sales
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dissapear start almost half of
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period
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. Looking
to
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the detail of Rentals,
started
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starting
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from the highest
number
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almost to 200.000
consistantly
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consistently
dropped until the end of
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period
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the period
a period
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in 2011 about more than 50.000.
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DVD
sales
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started from the
buttom
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bottom
almost 50.000 rapidly climbed to 2005 and
contine
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continued
depict fluctuation and
reach
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reached
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the highest
number
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compare
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compared
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to the others
in
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at
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the end of
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period
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the period
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time.
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, VHS
sales
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started with
the
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apply
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half of DVD
sales
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and
significanly
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significantly
dropped to 2005 and lost
number
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from 2006 to 2011,
continuesly
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continuously
continues
with
opposite
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an opposite
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story from Blu-ray
sales
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didn't
showed
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show
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point in 2002 until 2006, but from 2007
this
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trend gave numbers and slowly growth to small
number
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approximately 10.000
in
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at
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the end of
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period
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the period
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, sales, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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