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ome people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to orwork in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, there
are
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number
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a number
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 of reasons for
people
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learning
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to learn
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 a foreign
language
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,
while
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 some believe that the main reasons are to travel or to
work
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, others claim that there are
also
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 other causes for
aquaring
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acquiring
squaring
 a new
language
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. In the following
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 both sides of the
arguments
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argument
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 will be
discssed
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discussed
.
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 with, one of the most important
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 of learning a
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 is to travel around the world communicating without
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language
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a language
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 barrier. Especially, with the advances in transportation
traveling
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travelling
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 around the globe has become quite popular and cheap,
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 many individuals are learning well-known languages with the aim of exploring other cultures and places. The second most obvious choice is
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to obtain
work
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 particularly, for
people
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 who want to
work
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 internationally or gain a better position where they
work
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, and
as a
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result
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 a great number of
people
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 are striving to speak one or two different languages.
On the other hand
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,
however
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, apart from these reasons, there are
also
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 other objectives. Because of
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globalization and the advances in technology and mainstream media becoming
common place
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 around the world,
people
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 are learning predominant
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 in order that they can follow their favourite international programmes. Another widespread goal is to study in other countries;
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, for the time being, I am in the process of learning
English
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language
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 in order to do my
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PhD
 in Italy.
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, it is true that
work
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 and travel are the most common motivations for obtaining a foreign dialect, but
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nevertheless
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 there are many other intentions with
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 purpose of
aquiring
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acquiring
 a different lingo.
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grammar
Try to minimize grammatical mistakes like 'aquare' corrected as 'acquire', to improve your accuracy and clarity.
spelling
Pay attention to spelling errors, such as 'dscssed', corrected as 'discussed', to enhance the readability of the essay.
development
Provide more specific examples to strengthen your arguments and make them more relatable to the reader.
structure
The essay presents a well-structured introduction and conclusion, clearly outlining the topic and summarizing the main points.
balanced
The essay discusses both sides of the argument, showing a balanced understanding of the topic.
examples
You provide personal experience to support your points, which enriches your argument and makes it more compelling.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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