• Students in schools and universities learn more from their teachers than through other means such as the Internet, libraries, and TV. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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With the processing of technology, there are debates about whether students can learn more
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the teachers or
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new approaches
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, libraries, and television.
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topic from both points of view and express my perspective. Human beings have
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information, as well
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their own approaches
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reaching their knowledge. In
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other words, teachers just concentrate
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the subject
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like to know, and explain it in their
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which may not
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with the other students. To illustrate, visual people
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when the teacher
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their lesson by speaking.
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, humans are prone to oblivion that
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them to not explain their subject in entirely clear. In terms of the new methods that
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on the technology, I firmly believe that it has a worth and
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of data. It is possible to say that libraries,
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, and TV have deep and various topics that
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it by many people.
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, students have
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to access it at any time and find
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them. Visual
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,
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can find multiple
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in many languages and individuals and pictures that depend on the graphics.
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, despite people having
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of
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. I tend to believe that
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method of teaching is the best way to gain
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lesson.
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they can find many ways of
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You address the task well by discussing both traditional and modern methods of learning.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • direct instruction
  • personalize
  • learning experience
  • immediate feedback
  • clarification
  • social skills
  • interpersonal skills
  • vast amount
  • information
  • resources
  • self-directed learning
  • independence
  • critical thinking
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